Chapter One - Page 14

30th May 2016, 7:10 PM in Chapter One
Page 14
Average Rating: 4.67 (3 votes)

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Lili 30th May 2016, 7:10 PM edit delete
Eight hours and 40 cigarettes later... (And coffee and donuts, that goes without saying.)

(I haven't found a satisfying way to "transcribe" Gordon's loud voice yet... The font used in the previous page was OK for one speech bubble, but not for a whole page. It's kind of distracting and difficult to read. So until I find the perfect font, you'll just have to use your imagination!)
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Bob Smeets 1st Jun 2016, 8:48 PM edit delete reply
i think you nailed the dialogue with the last page. just have bold text with jagged balloon lines for emphasis. you can't go wrong with that.
Lili 1st Jun 2016, 11:35 PM edit delete reply
Thanks for your input! Yeah, I liked it too, but I tried it on the whole page here and it didn't really work. The font is bigger than the regular one, so I had to make the balloons bigger too - which means they were half-hiding the character's heads in some panels. More balloon than character doesn't look too great!).

I'm still trying different things to find the perfect font...
Big Ed 2nd Jun 2016, 7:59 AM edit delete reply
Gordon looks brilliant as well!

And once again, I appreciate your eye for details, especially in the first panel: the folded hands, the cigarette ends, the half-eaten donut, Albert's sleeve smeared in blood, the blurred raindrops outside the window.
Lili 9th Jun 2016, 3:43 PM edit delete reply
Thanks very much! I always spend a lot of time working on details, so I'm glad people notice and appreciate them. =)
Red Jack 4th May 2017, 11:58 AM edit delete reply
Red Jack
Not gonna lie.

I grinned from ear to ear upon the introduction of Gordon Cole. You nailed him down to his funny ear piece and shouty dialogue.
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